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Hush now,
I'm sorry the dream must end.

It's time to wake up
and face the world.

Reality is harsh,
the people are cold,
that's how it is
and you must wake up.

For you have been asleep long enough.

Time to wake love,
and be with your people
they wait for you
and have never given up.
You can't let them down.

The alarm's going off,
and reality is waiting.

You are only human
and cannot do much
but everyone is important
and life is waiting just for you.

Can you hear their cries?
And the bellows of pain?
You can stop them
but only if you wake up.

It's time to wake up love,
and face the world.
They cry for your return
and you can't let them down.
I swear if any of you guys ever become my real life friends you better wake me up by reading this poem with an English accent. Seriously.

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Ducklee6 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This...is...AWESOME!
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Aifos96 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yes sir!
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
Good! Can't have you sleeping in past noon. :salute:
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Aifos96 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course not, sir! :salute:
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Nice!^^
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No prob!:D
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ashxnobody Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
Sounds like the beginning of something big. I like it. :)
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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vykoth Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student Writer
First off, what is the identity of the speaker in this poem? Why so much repetition of the same idea? After the third stanza, I think it gets to be too much.

This line: "And see with your people" needs some tweaking to be better understood.

I think the best thing you have done in this piece is the development of the voice. If you can broaden your message along the same theme and revise this thing, you could have a successful poem that is truly reminiscent of that time of waking up to a soothing voice.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you, I'll try my best to improve the next time I try to write something like this.
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SharazDestler Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
Repetition of the same idea: I dunno, but it sounds like the dreamer is trying to find the strength to wake up to another cold, grey day after dreaming of a better world.
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SkittyKittyCat Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Wow... This is a great poem.^^
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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SkittyKittyCat Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome.^^
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elmerthewizard Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is just lovely.. Absolutely stunning, and I can picture it being said so sweetly. My new and absolute favorite!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
Oh that makes me so happy that you enjoy it!
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silentangelawaits Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Student Artist
im from england so could i read it out loud if i ever become ur friend and new u in person? xD hyper but yh ^_^ Im British u know ^_^ xD
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
You are now my new best friend. Totally, come live under my bed and say this every night until I fall asleep. :please:
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silentangelawaits Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Artist
YAY! sweet living under the bed is my dream :D hehe
say which bit?

that im british u know? XD
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Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
lol so it's official, come live under my bed.
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silentangelawaits Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Student Artist
YAY! :) okay -crawls under your bed- ^^ ah my new home :) hehe
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Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
Awesome! Okay *gives you internet, blankets, pillows and food.*
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silentangelawaits Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student Artist
sweet ^_^ -nibbles cookie- perfect new home :)
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student Writer
Yay now we can stay up late and watch movies and do stupid things and no one else can tell us otherwise! :squee:
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spencerbeavcoon Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I read this in my head with an english accent :heart:
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
You are one awesome person.
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spencerbeavcoon Featured By Owner Oct 31, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:hug:
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killuaxme Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2012
it is so sweet i like it =D
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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killuaxme Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2012
you are welcome =D
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