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Tea with the rabbit today
just the same as every day,
every single day and every single night.

And when he danced and sang
I could not join in merriment
for the ropes that bound did not budge

"Merry Unbirthday!"
He would scream and cry while sipping tea,
and I would laugh while hiding tears.

He said he was late,
for what I know naught,
but he did not leave my nightmare.

“The Queen of Hearts is evil!”
And I agreed blindly. Yet I could not help
but wonder if she was really the evil one.

Dormouse, his friend of valiant honor,
rammed his sword into my thigh
and grinned when I wept and bled.

And my one and only friend sat across,
sipping his tea without a care, mumbling nonsense.
The giant hat upon his head outweighed his judgement.

Tea was scalding as it poured down my throat,
he didn't care as his feet thumped down
pleas to stop fell on deaf cottontail ears.

And when the cry of ‘off with her head!’ sounded
I couldn’t help but be relived and yet I still cried.
For Wonderland was anything but wonderful.
For :iconpoetry-book:'s semi finals of Scratch That!

Theme: Horror/Nightmares
Type: Ballad

This is (obviously) based of Alice in Wonderland. The movie and story that most loved gave me nightmares as a child, I absolutely loathed that movie and book. So when the theme of nightmares and horror came up, I knew right away what I was going to write about.
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:iconkaizenkitty:
KaizenKitty Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Student Writer
Did you win? :eager:
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Student Writer
Super late reply, but I didn't unfortunately.
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KaizenKitty Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Student Writer
damn :p
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:iconnemox7:
NemoX7 Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2013   Writer
How creative. I instantly got the influence of Alice in Wonderland straight away. I loved how you twisted it to imagination in this delightfully surreal poem.
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Im-A-Hyper-Fangirl Featured By Owner May 24, 2013
I really love when people put a darker side to fairy tales :)
Great poem!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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atlantifique Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
... saw the black and white recently... Alice in Wonderland creeps me out, and yet fascinates me.
i have nightmares that go like this... there are so many creepy things in Alice I can't believe it sometimes.
fodder for thought as it were. :)
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks. And I haven't seen the black and white version, is it good?
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:iconatlantifique:
atlantifique Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, i think so. W.C. Fields is even in it.
Granted it isn't Star Wars or anything, but i couldn't take my eyes off it. But i like B-movies too.
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VaryagOfMiklagaard Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
:icondafuqplz:
Unexpected...
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Student Writer
Just what I planned :evillaugh:
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:iconvaryagofmiklagaard:
VaryagOfMiklagaard Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Having delved into the metaphysics this:
I am not going to share.
But I will say this, stay away from the tea from now on.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Student Writer
Too bad tea is delicious though!
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VaryagOfMiklagaard Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Straight green for me please.
And earl grey hot thank you!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Student Writer
Chamomile is my favorite
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:iconvaryagofmiklagaard:
VaryagOfMiklagaard Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
I've gotten strange looks from people when I drink just tea with nothing else.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 26, 2013  Student Writer
Hey if that's how you like it who cares
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner May 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wonderful:rose:
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner May 16, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are so very welcome!
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NoriMori Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
I hated the movie too. I mean, I enjoyed the fancifulness, but it seemed like Alice couldn't catch a break, and everyone was retarded and/or mean. I think I'll like the book much better, though.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Wait until you meet the Walrus and the Carpenter...
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:iconnorimori:
NoriMori Featured By Owner May 15, 2013
Do you mean that in a good way or in a bad way?
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Student Writer
Read it for yourself and decide:

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Sukoshikaze Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Very intriguing imagery came to mind from this. Great work.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Sukoshikaze Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
You're very welcome~!
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:icontrekkie-aspie:
Trekkie-Aspie Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
Yes... I think Wonderland is supposed to beget wonder, more than anything.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Maybe, but it still freaked me out as a kid and adult
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:icontrekkie-aspie:
Trekkie-Aspie Featured By Owner May 14, 2013
Well, they do.
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:iconrai-knightshade:
Rai-Knightshade Featured By Owner May 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It IS kinda creepy. Especially the most recent movie. That was... Definitely a Johnny Depp movie.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Tim Burton and Johnny Depp man, an unstoppable pair right there
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Rai-Knightshade Featured By Owner May 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lord help us all.
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naida-vt Featured By Owner May 12, 2013
I am an avid Alice fan, but something I have noticed about my literature and media consumption is that I love to hear different interpretations, inverse stories, non-canon prequels and such... Gregory Maguire who wrote Wicked is one of my favorite authors at the moment.
This is a chilling and wonderfully written piece, and as much as it sucks that it gave you nightmares and you hated it, I do enjoy seeing someone have such a very very different experience of something I am quite familiar with.
Kudos!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks dear! And even though I didn't like it, I am glad that you did
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Squiddy-chan Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Wow, that's great! I've never really thought about it that way, but I can see where you're coming from. Certain parts of the story creeped me out a bit too.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Oh yes, especially parts like the Walrus one
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Squiddy-chan Featured By Owner May 13, 2013
Oh, yes. The Walrus always creeped me out. Those poor Oysters... And I never liked Dweedle Dum and Tweedle Dee either. They just seemed so unnatural. *shudders*
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 15, 2013  Student Writer
I loathed the talking flowers and the Queen of Hearts. I always thought they were all so vain and cruel, I couldn't see anything else
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Squiddy-chan Featured By Owner May 19, 2013
I tended to find the flowers more annoying than anything. Same with the queen of hearts, actually. They just annoyed me far too much.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner May 20, 2013  Student Writer
Who did you find the creepiest?
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Squiddy-chan Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
Out of all the characters? Definitely Tweedle Dum and Tweedle Dee. I was never overly fond of Bill the Lizard and the Dodo, either. I don't really know why.
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Oilux Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Student Writer
Oh yes Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum were really weird
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NinaFoFina Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist
Love it ~:heart: I can imagine the whole thing right now, it really captures the creepy factor of Wonderland. I always felt claustrophobic as a kid watching the movie, knowing that she was underground in another world, even though I'm not even claustrophobic. Hmm... it's kinda hard for me to explain but it was an uncomfortable feeling.
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Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
I understand. When watching, I would completely forget she fell underground though. Now that I think about it, how could there be so much down a simple rabbit hole?
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SayeedaSiha Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Hobbyist
That movie always scared me as a kid. Great job in summing up how creepy the story is.
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Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Wikita Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student General Artist
I love Wonderland, Hatter was always my favorite.
Very interesting perspective, never thought of it that way before.
Lovely piece.
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Oilux Featured By Owner May 13, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks
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MadxxxHatter Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
Usually not so keen on poetry, but I love Alice in Wonderland and this is just perfect for it. Very well done.
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