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Sunflower kisses dance across my skin
laying down in a field of wheat in the afternoon.
You appear almost out of nowhere
and lay down next to me as you were meant to be.

The sun hurts my eyes,
as I squint at the clouds and try to make shapes.
You stare at me and I try to think,
yet the more you stare the harder it is to ignore.

Do you want the sun?

The sun?

Ya, the sun.
Everyone gives the moon as a gift,
but to me, the only thing that can rival your charm
is the suns great shine,
and even then when you emerge outside
the suns grows dark and burnt.


You never were a poet
I couldn't help but laugh
at how long you probably spent
thinking of that one line.

I like the sun.

Then I'll wrangle the sun,
all for you.


We laid in the suns warmth
of sunflower kisses
and the tickles of wheat instead of grass
and nothing else mattered in the world.

I love you.

I love you too.
For round one of #poetry-book's Scratch That contest.
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It's meant to be between two guys, but I don't think that I conveyed that to well....Any suggestions about how to make it better?
My boyfriend used that pick up line on me about the sun so you can all thank him for that because all I know are the nerdy fandom related ones.

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LoWo Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013
"and nothing else mattered in the world." i love the love in this part
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Oilux Featured By Owner May 1, 2013  Student Writer
That's my favorite line as well.
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Curlygurly222 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love this:) Its beautiful and you can really feel the emotion. Maybe add in some he said or says? I don't know if that will ruin this and its the most obvious way to make it known that you are talking about two guys but I'm not very creative when it comes to words:S
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks so much! I'll try my best to maybe change it.
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Pryate Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I truly appreciate your style. It's very modern.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2012  Student Writer
Oh wow really? That means so much to me!
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
AWW!!!!!!:icon0inuhappycryplz:
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Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 23, 2012  Student Writer
AW thanks for the cute icon
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome!^^
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HourglassOfLostTime Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012
Very sweet ^^
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