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The pendulum swings
back and forth,
back and forth,
the pendulum swings

Click click click
the clock counts forward
simple five note tune
the hands striking forward

The pendulum swings
back and forth,
back and forth,
gently hitting the sides

Midnight tolls the tune
Opheliac dreams capture all
chanting in time with
click and clack of the tolling clock

The pendulum swings
back and forth,
back and forth,
the pendulum swings

fantasy images
sandstorm desolation
loveless fixation
hopeless beings

The pendulum swings
back and forth,
back and forth,
the pendulum swings

Breathless awakening
ring and chime of tolling clock
rising bodies of sleepless thoughts
chilling bones.

The pendulum swings
back and forth,
back and forth,
the pendulum swings
Happy Holidays have a dark poem on me.
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ilikeeatingcatnipi Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2013
so rhythmic
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
Just what I was going for!
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mechanicalsky23 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting.
Well written, too! I like it :D
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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mechanicalsky23 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome :)
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94081lego Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
okay, wow. That was so amazingly written that I don't have any criticism to give you! Keep up the good work!
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Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student Writer
Oh my really? :blush: Thank you so much!
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Good work!:D
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You really don't need to thank me...:iconembarrasedplz:
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Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student Writer
Yes I do! You're such a sweetheart to me.
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aww! Stop you're making me blush!!:iconablushplz:
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Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Writer
:love:
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I LUV YOU TOO!!:iconthatsloveplz:
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Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2013  Student Writer
:iconiloveyouplz:
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
Okay well that was a weird thing to link me to.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
I don't draw.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I found this piece interesting. Through the repitition of the one stanza, one can assume that it represents the passing of time. Through the rest, as I interpretted it, I can't decide if it is portraying how death is evercoming, or how one hopes to escape death only to find that there is no way to do so and that they are always on a timer counting down to their demise... Hm... well, why not both? :meow: Very pleasing, and nicely written~ <3
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
I...you got everything that I thought when I was writing this piece. I mean no one has ever been able to do that before.
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Invoking Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Really~? Hmhm, I guess I know what I'm talking about after all ouo
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Writer
Yes, you most certainly do.
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rebelnijamaster Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Student Writer
I really like the repetition this has. Not only the repetition of the one stanza, but also the repetitions of sounds throughout.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
Oh, that makes me so happy to hear! Repetition is my forte.
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BeyondTheFishBowl505 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing!
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Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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BeyondTheFishBowl505 Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure dear :3
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