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A cut, a tear, a fold,
slice of color and a cut or two,
and another paper butterfly is born.

IV drips in the hand
keeping everything in place
while the cuts and tears and folds
keeps going on.

One thousand, six hundred and sixty six.

That's the number
she was told to make.

One thousand, six hundred and sixty six.
Until she can get a wish.
A nice nurse had told her so,
and shown her how to make them
but she had only made thirty out of the
one thousand, six hundred and sixty six
paper butterflies.

It seemed like such an impossible number
that one thousand six hundred and sixty six
but our patient needed that wish
just like everyone else,
in that hospital that our patient was at.

Her wish though
was not what someone expects
from our patient who will not last much longer.

Her wish,
is for her family to be happy when she's gone
and that they won't miss her to much
and that they will find someone else
after she has gone.

Her wish
isn't to stay
and to get better
because she knows
that it won't happen.

So instead
she wishes
for everything
to be happy
when she is finally gone.

And for that
our patient needs
one thousand
six hundred
and sixty six
paper butterflies.
On *Anatopist's 435 writing prompts ([link]) one was the number 1,666 (I think it was number 77). It reminded me of that story about how if you make 1,000 paper cranes you get a wish.





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I-like-blue Featured By Owner May 1, 2013
I liked the S'ssssssssss
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Oilux Featured By Owner May 1, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you
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xxazureyuzukixx Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I like how you started the beginning, it just made me hooked to it.
also I like how you said 1,666 on a different line.
very beautiful and I will like you on facebook
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Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Student Writer
Oh gosh thank you so much!
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xxazureyuzukixx Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
your welcome!
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mechanicalsky23 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Cooool :love:
Isn't the story you're talking about "Sadako and the Thousand Paper Cranes"??
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Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 22, 2013  Student Writer
Yes! I just could not remember that story
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mechanicalsky23 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hehe. I remember reading it in first grade. The only thing I remember is a soccer game and an earthquake causing a crane to loose its leg. (I think that's what happened... :P)
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Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2013  Student Writer
Sounds like a very crazy story
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mechanicalsky23 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Haha, yeah.
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UsuaWolfPup Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
I really did try and write a critique on your work, but I can't get over how much I love this poem. I'm one of the few who apparently never has heard of the cranes, so this story honestly pushed me toward tears. I really love this, please write more poetry. You have much talent.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! I'll always keep writing.
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boogrl721 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
so sad but so beautiful at the same time grate job ... i'm going to go cry now
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Student Writer
Aw :hug: don't cry!
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birdsonqs Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Love it! It reminds me of the story of Sadaki Sasako. :)
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Hmm I've never heard of that before.
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I actually made me cry......:iconcryinplz:
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Awww :hug: I'm sorry.
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Don't worry about it!!!:iconlsmileplz:
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reflectionsinwater Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It's sad, but so lovely and written so well.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Phobicangels23 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
this is so sweet and sad...reminds me of the story of the girl who tried to fold 1,000 paper cranes, but died before she could finish....
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boogrl721 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
i remember that story too so sad
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
I haven't heard of that story before but I have heard of the legend of the paper cranes.
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KonekoYoukai Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This... This is so... Sweet doesn't begin to describe it, but...
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
:hug:
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Narufan90 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
awww.... yeah it takes a long time to do...
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
I know I remember one time I wanted to make one and it took me like an hour.
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Narufan90 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It takes a lot of practice! After a while you find folds you don't have to do and can eliminate them :)
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
Really? Well I must try again.
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Narufan90 Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D They are A LOT of fun when you get the hang of it!
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TegzyPuff97 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i tried to make 1000 cranes once, i think between me and my friend we made about 200... not many...
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Are you kidding me? That's a ton!
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TegzyPuff97 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
still not 1000
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student Writer
But a lot more than most people ever make.
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TegzyPuff97 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i guess
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UnluckyNumberXIII Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Aww...
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
:hug:
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FantasiaVII Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012
This is so beautiful! At first I was a little thrown off by the paper butterflies and 1666, because I know the paper cranes version, but then I read the description. It such a creative interpretation!

(I'm actually currently trying to make 1000 paper cranes, so.... Yeah.)
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks! Best of luck in your journey to make 1000 paper cranes.
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FantasiaVII Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012
Thanks.
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Student Writer
This poem is really beautiful! :D I love the emotion, and it's just... Sweet. Great work!
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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BelaRoseWolf Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome!
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Hoshigetsu Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist
Such a selfless wish :) so sweet
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks.
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SimpleSilkSky Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
dissapointed this wasn't about Coldplay's paper butterflies :C (thisismefangirling)
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012  Student Writer
They have a song called that? I must listen!
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