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If every mistake I ever made
was a scar on my body
there would be no pure skin.

Every inch would host a jagged line
where my so called 'selfish pride'
managed to get the better of me.

Idiot mistakes of my youth,
and moronic declarations
of what I thought was insignificant.

Mistakes, errors of judgment,
a complete lapse in sense,
that litter my skin with memories of pain.

For a moment
I thought I was important
not someone to be overlooked.

My selfish pride betwixt me
for everything was little
compared to the pride I raised.

A fall to Earth
waking on concrete
no one besides me.

My mistakes are scars
littering my skin
tainting once pure flesh.

Blunders of thoughts,
guilt as endless as the sky,
never ending weight of it.

My mistakes,
are meant to be just that
mistakes.

Though they haunt my thoughts everyday
I can't help but hope that one day
they will be scars instead of thoughts
so everyone else will know
they thoughts that haunt me everyday.
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An apology, in a way. To friends and family who won't forget the past.




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:icondracogirl121:
:) Its a good poem
<3 ~
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=Oilux Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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Mood: Stumped ~LuvThemHungerGames Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
May you please resend this critique to me? I apologize :) As still being a newb here I often don't know how to work everything. And when I moved my critiques from my deviant watch folder to my critique requests folder I lost them :/ So could you possibly send that again? (and the other poem you requested?) *Sheepish grin* Thanks :D
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:iconthemonsterinsideme:
... This needs way more attention. This is openly and AMAZINGLY written-- so honest and apologetic... I love it.
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=Oilux Oct 6, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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Mood: Sadness ~pje0860 Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I understand that...=C
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=Oilux Oct 6, 2012  Student Writer
:hug:
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Mood: Sadness ~pje0860 Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
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*The-Lost-Hope Oct 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Interesting poem. I'd like to point out that hurting one's self isn't good, just saying. But really it says a lot about how the mistakes we make never seem to go away, best we can do is learn to laugh at them (the mistakes) and better ourselves.
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