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If every mistake I ever made
was a scar on my body
there would be no pure skin.

Every inch would host a jagged line
where my so called 'selfish pride'
managed to get the better of me.

Idiot mistakes of my youth,
and moronic declarations
of what I thought was insignificant.

Mistakes, errors of judgment,
a complete lapse in sense,
that litter my skin with memories of pain.

For a moment
I thought I was important
not someone to be overlooked.

My selfish pride betwixt me
for everything was little
compared to the pride I raised.

A fall to Earth
waking on concrete
no one besides me.

My mistakes are scars
littering my skin
tainting once pure flesh.

Blunders of thoughts,
guilt as endless as the sky,
never ending weight of it.

My mistakes,
are meant to be just that
mistakes.

Though they haunt my thoughts everyday
I can't help but hope that one day
they will be scars instead of thoughts
so everyone else will know
they thoughts that haunt me everyday.
An apology, in a way. To friends and family who won't forget the past.




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KikuMizu Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013

I wish I had made more mistakes to learn from; I feel so green as the world is finally opening me up to be torn apart by others. Though I am speaking of jobs and experience, I do not try to belittle the piece, just offering in what way I can understand it.

Also, the last line "They thoughts that haunt me everyday" I think you mean "The thoughts..." Small trip-up.

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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013  Student Writer
I most likely did. Thank you!
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KikuMizu Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
A minor slip may or may not trip a piece. I don't think it did for me but better safe than sorry. I have had people who have had a small mistake in a crucial area of their work and it completely ruined the tension.
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dracogirl121 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012
:) Its a good poem
<3 ~
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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dracogirl121 Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012
welcomes :3
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LuvThemHungerGames Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
May you please resend this critique to me? I apologize :) As still being a newb here I often don't know how to work everything. And when I moved my critiques from my deviant watch folder to my critique requests folder I lost them :/ So could you possibly send that again? (and the other poem you requested?) *Sheepish grin* Thanks :D
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Themonsterinsideme Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012
... This needs way more attention. This is openly and AMAZINGLY written-- so honest and apologetic... I love it.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :hug:
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pje0860 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
I understand that...=C
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student Writer
:hug:
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pje0860 Featured By Owner Dec 2, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012  Student General Artist
Interesting poem. I'd like to point out that hurting one's self isn't good, just saying. But really it says a lot about how the mistakes we make never seem to go away, best we can do is learn to laugh at them (the mistakes) and better ourselves.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student Writer
Oh I know that hurting oneself is not a good thing. And thanks, you got the message very well.
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012  Student General Artist
You're welcome and thank you for making it clear.
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EternallyForsaken Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2012   General Artist
Ahhh, AMAZING CONCEPT!!! The opening stanza really caught my attention. Good job with the whole thing. Um... Hopefully your friends and family will read it.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! I hope that they will read it as well.
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EternallyForsaken Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012   General Artist
Are you depending on them to find it or will you show it to them?
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012  Student Writer
I'm going to show them, but part of me hopes that they'll care enough to look here and find it on their own.
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EternallyForsaken Featured By Owner Oct 6, 2012   General Artist
Oh, so I'm assuming they have accounts on here as well?
Hopefully they'll read it either way and understand.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2012  Student Writer
Ya they do. I'm going to see everyone today so I'll if they haven't seen it yet they will.
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EternallyForsaken Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012   General Artist
Did they?
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Student Writer
Ah yes they have seen it. They were all nice and really supportive about it.
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