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A long time ago, when the world was new,
and longer than anyone can remember
magic existed in the world.

It healed the sick
and didn't cause anything bad.
Magic was for good
and never harmed the people.

Then one day
a sorcerer broken by pain
and an outcast of society
used his magic
to hurt and cause pain.

He killed with his magic,
and made people suffer
in ways that should never be allowed.

The evil sorcerer went across the land
never sparing a soul and making
curses that could never be broken.

Five of the best magicians were shocked
and banded together
to stop his evil reign over the people.

Nothing the good magicians did worked
and they were faced with a final
completely unspeakable action.

The good magicians joined hands,
bound their power together
and used their life force
to stop his ways of evil.

The evil sorcerer fell,
and after that it was decided
that magic should never be used again
in case someone else decided
to use it the way the sorcerer did.

Now because of pain and a broken soul
magic isn't allowed for use by regular people
but the most exceptional people
know the spells that help everyone.
Magic is no longer called what it was,
but now it is known, simply by
miracles.
Written for the :iconrainbow-4all-club:'s magic competition.

And I won second place!! Thank you everyone:
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One of those few poems that is fresh, and as original as they come - as I write this critique, I cannot help but wonder why I haven't read this before or why I cannot relate with it. A breath of fresh air brought about with such a simple meter and a free verse approach that could have easily made this masterpiece something meant for children or even young adults.

Why? Primarily because of its simple storyline, the most basic elements with which it was written - even the imperceptive coaxing manner in which the title itself gives away the obvious and yet leaves us wondering why we didn't think in such a manner anyways.

The ending, as simple as it was kept, was also a perceptive subtle side-story about us as human beings - there is depth in that ending, and it becomes all the more clear as we re-read this work.

Well written.
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katr14 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Congratulation! You won the 2- place at :iconrainbow-4all-club: Magic competition!!!! --> [link]
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Student Writer
Omg really? Oh thank you so much!
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katr14 Featured By Owner Sep 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Yes really! :happybounce: Congratulation!!!! :party:
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katr14 Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Student General Artist
Your image is featured at :iconrainbow-4all-club: weekly newspaper as one of the entries to the magic competition! :dummy: So it is voting time!!!!! --> [link]
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012  Student Writer
Yay! Thanks for letting me know.
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katr14 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2012  Student General Artist
You are very welcome!
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ExaltedPoet Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:typerhappy:
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Oilux Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Student Writer
Lol another one?
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ExaltedPoet Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:D
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pendragon693 Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012  Student Writer
.....This is phenomenal. I could write a whole story based off this. BRAVO.
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