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When I was young,
I knew a girl.
She was so warm and bright,
so I asked her that question
that all children must answer.

'What do you want to be
when you grow up?'

Her eyes lit up with joy
and she jumped with excitement.

'A dancer!
No, an astronaut!
Wait, President!
A scientist!
I'll be famous
and in movies!
My name
will be everywhere!'

She listed so many more
until she finally just smiled
and looked at me with eyes filled
with child-like wonder.

'I could be anything I wanted.'

Years and years later,
I saw the same girl again
but her eyes no longer
lit up with wonder.

I asked her,
'What did you end up being?'

She smiled the hollow smile
that adults have when talking to the young.

'Not what I wanted to be
when I was young.'


Nothing more was said on the matter
but I could see that there was no more wonder
in the eyes that once shone so brightly.
As we grow, our minds grow with us. Did you grow to be what you wanted to be when you were young?

Or more importantly, do you still have your child-like wonder?



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:iconshehrozeameen:
I've been that way - this is something no movie or book or any form of artistic presentation could ever describe as brilliantly and as bluntly as you did - such works, frankly, are only appreciated in their form when they're put bluntly.

Grow Up has that emotive attachment - its not so much a mere play of words put together to provide a lesson on who we are and how we become something else... Its the smae person, in a different attire, wearing a sad face, standing in a carnival of rust, wishing that it would either start again or stop soon.
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This almost made me cry, even though I am not an adult yet. People tell me I have lost that childish wonder too early. I have seen the bad in life before my time. I have been broken. And this made me remember what it was like to be childish. I really loved how you wrote this. The grammar was perfect, and the transitions through your sentences were amazing.
" She smiled the hollow smile
that all adults have."

That is my favorite line. It is so true. A young girl came up to me and asked, " Why do your eyes look so empty?" I had been so surprised when a girl that young had noticed something so small. Our youth has so much potential, that is shot down, destroyed, and shredded. You captured this perfectly.
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:iconrogue98:
Rogue98 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Student
So...what's the moral here?
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
Don't grow up.
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:iconxenocidaender:
XenocidaEnder Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student Filmographer
Many thanks. This is exactly the kind of poetry I sought, setting the mood the way I like it.
...also, asking quite scary, important and overall likeable question. Once again, thanks, and well done
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Seraphine-Harmonium Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   Artisan Crafter
That's horrible! But in the tragic way, not as in bad writing. This makes me want to cry!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:iconseraphine-harmonium:
Seraphine-Harmonium Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013   Artisan Crafter
It's true! :cry:
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Daws3 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   General Artist
I try to maintain a childlike wonder and view while taking my experiences into account and not be taken advantage of. I'm not completely what I want to be yet, but I'm working on it ;) Great job with this, you've expressed the concept perfectly.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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Daws3 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013   General Artist
np :)
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GoodOldBaz Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconsadcryplz: This - this is his so heartbreaking.... growing up has sort of been a punch in the face for me - a disillusioning - the world seemed so wonderful... but now....? Sigh....I suppose I oughtn't to think that way - but it's hard not to.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student Writer
I know just how you feel.
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GoodOldBaz Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug: glad to know somebody does.
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underestimatedbeauty Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Photographer
Beautiful and true. Sad, but true.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you, so much
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:iconhatamani:
Hatamani Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student General Artist
that made me cry, sad sad tears.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Writer
Aw I'm sorry about that.
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:iconhatamani:
Hatamani Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student General Artist
Don't be. It was amazing.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
Aw thank you!
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:iconfoxymao:
FoxyMao Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is so touching, and really true too. I can totally relate, I see so many people in that case, it's so sad . :(
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you, but honestly I wish that so many people didn't know this pain.
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:iconfoxymao:
FoxyMao Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Me too, it's kind of sad .. :(
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MohamadKaaki Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
Okay to be honest, this touched my heart! Like seriously I felt something in my heart while reading this I don't know why! It is soooo touching in a weird way! I sear right now I got mixed up feelings, I just don't know what to say about this!! I am sooo lucky that I stumbled through this and read it...
Great job, got a great way in writing and this is so freakin touching!!
Thank you so much for writing this, I am going to watch you and check your profile to see whats more in there, I'll 100% fave it in real life and in deviantart hehe!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student Writer
Oh my thank you! :tighthug: :blush:
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QueenofbloodedRoses Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
wow, this is great ^^
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Student Writer
Aw thank you!
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:iconsick-games:
sick-games Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is so lovely, something I'm sure most can relate to. Great work, amazing job :)
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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LightrayPhotography Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Is this a question of age... or a question of gender? I only ask because the only job listed that is easier for a female to recieve, in america, rather than a male is a dancer. For women to be famous then they have to be much more extraordinary then the random males in mass media.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jan 13, 2013  Student Writer
It's meant to be a question of age, simply that of growing older and seeing the world as it is.
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Hermine456 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
THIS.IS.SO. GENIOUS!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Student Writer
Oh wow you really think so? :blush:
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:iconhermine456:
Hermine456 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
yeah!!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:icontheheek:
theheek Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
i think we all loose it maybe thats what growing up really means
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Student Writer
That statement hold so much truth.
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:icontheheek:
theheek Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Traditional Artist
yes i think so too
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GoldenGirl954 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012
How sad :(
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Student Writer
:hug: I know
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PoetryToTheMasses Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2012
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Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012  Student Writer
Oh my gosh, thank you so much! I have never felt so honored and I am like about to burst into tears and I just can't convey how happy and flattered I am right now. Thank you so much! :iconcryforeverplz:
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PoetryToTheMasses Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012
Wow, I'm glad this made you happy! You're most welcome :)
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
*sigh* I hate when children loose their innocence. It kills me inside. I love how kids are pure and innocent, but when that changes, it's sad.
This is really beautiful. Truthful and sad, but beautiful nonetheless.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Student Writer
I know, the sad thing is that this actually happened to me. I really knew someone who lost their innocence and hope. It was so sad. And thanks!
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:iconsummerday27:
summerday27 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Yeah, it really is sad :(
You're welcome.
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SerenityFey Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
It's sad what the world does to people. That's why, no matter what people say, I want to remain a child at heart forever!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2012  Student Writer
People who grow up but are still children at heart are the best kind of people.
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:iconserenityfey:
SerenityFey Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Exactly ^.^
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DomoSushiLuver Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012
wow that happened to me so many times and i don't what be when i grow up
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2012  Student Writer
Same here. I can't count how many times I've been asked that.
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DomoSushiLuver Featured By Owner Aug 5, 2012
when i was little i wanted to be a super hero because their awesome and i had crush on batman
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