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When I was young,
I knew a girl.
She was so warm and bright,
so I asked her that question
that all children must answer.

'What do you want to be
when you grow up?'

Her eyes lit up with joy
and she jumped with excitement.

'A dancer!
No, an astronaut!
Wait, President!
A scientist!
I'll be famous
and in movies!
My name
will be everywhere!'

She listed so many more
until she finally just smiled
and looked at me with eyes filled
with child-like wonder.

'I could be anything I wanted.'

Years and years later,
I saw the same girl again
but her eyes no longer
lit up with wonder.

I asked her,
'What did you end up being?'

She smiled the hollow smile
that adults have when talking to the young.

'Not what I wanted to be
when I was young.'


Nothing more was said on the matter
but I could see that there was no more wonder
in the eyes that once shone so brightly.
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As we grow, our minds grow with us. Did you grow to be what you wanted to be when you were young?

Or more importantly, do you still have your child-like wonder?



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:iconjhannuzs:
Very true, and sometimes we acquire limiting beliefs that stop us from exploring or learn skills even from cero.

You make me think about to intensify my curiosity, naivety or amazement at what I can learn.
Sometimes we believe somebody when they say: "why do you do that? it´s no use..." sometimes we are afraid about the ridicule, when the ridiculous factor is: not learning new things.

And you're right we often see people walking and they are "dragging the blanket", unwilling, perhaps because they forgot to build their dreams.

Your poem invites to create a better future!

We all need from time to time poems with this energy; to start over; to fly again; to create our dreams or new goals
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Amazing! You were born to be a writer!!! Five stars!!! I think you could have gone a little bit more into detail of the characters. But, other than that awesome! I can see that piece as a poster, or on clothes, blankets, or maybe even pillows! :pencil: I think, if you went into more detail the readers would get more sucked into your amazing art work. But, again other than that I thought it was amazing! I hope I get to see more of your amazing work, please don't stop writing I really love your incredible work!

Please, don't stop your work is A-M-A-Z-I-N-G
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~GoodOldBaz Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconsadcryplz: This - this is his so heartbreaking.... growing up has sort of been a punch in the face for me - a disillusioning - the world seemed so wonderful... but now....? Sigh....I suppose I oughtn't to think that way - but it's hard not to.
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=Oilux Apr 11, 2013  Student Writer
I know just how you feel.
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~GoodOldBaz Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:tighthug: glad to know somebody does.
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~underestimatedbeauty Jan 21, 2013  Student Photographer
Beautiful and true. Sad, but true.
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=Oilux Jan 22, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you, so much
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~Hatamani Jan 20, 2013  Student
that made me cry, sad sad tears.
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=Oilux Jan 20, 2013  Student Writer
Aw I'm sorry about that.
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~Hatamani Jan 20, 2013  Student
Don't be. It was amazing.
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=Oilux Jan 21, 2013  Student Writer
Aw thank you!
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!FoxyMao Jan 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is so touching, and really true too. I can totally relate, I see so many people in that case, it's so sad . :(
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