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When I was young,
I knew a girl.
She was so warm and bright,
so I asked her that question
that all children must answer.

'What do you want to be
when you grow up?'

Her eyes lit up with joy
and she jumped with excitement.

'A dancer!
No, an astronaut!
Wait, President!
A scientist!
I'll be famous
and in movies!
My name
will be everywhere!'

She listed so many more
until she finally just smiled
and looked at me with eyes filled
with child-like wonder.

'I could be anything I wanted.'

Years and years later,
I saw the same girl again
but her eyes no longer
lit up with wonder.

I asked her,
'What did you end up being?'

She smiled the hollow smile
that adults have when talking to the young.

'Not what I wanted to be
when I was young.'


Nothing more was said on the matter
but I could see that there was no more wonder
in the eyes that once shone so brightly.
As we grow, our minds grow with us. Did you grow to be what you wanted to be when you were young?

Or more importantly, do you still have your child-like wonder?



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:iconshehrozeameen:
I've been that way - this is something no movie or book or any form of artistic presentation could ever describe as brilliantly and as bluntly as you did - such works, frankly, are only appreciated in their form when they're put bluntly.

Grow Up has that emotive attachment - its not so much a mere play of words put together to provide a lesson on who we are and how we become something else... Its the smae person, in a different attire, wearing a sad face, standing in a carnival of rust, wishing that it would either start again or stop soon.
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This almost made me cry, even though I am not an adult yet. People tell me I have lost that childish wonder too early. I have seen the bad in life before my time. I have been broken. And this made me remember what it was like to be childish. I really loved how you wrote this. The grammar was perfect, and the transitions through your sentences were amazing.
" She smiled the hollow smile
that all adults have."

That is my favorite line. It is so true. A young girl came up to me and asked, " Why do your eyes look so empty?" I had been so surprised when a girl that young had noticed something so small. Our youth has so much potential, that is shot down, destroyed, and shredded. You captured this perfectly.
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Rogue98 Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2013  Student
So...what's the moral here?
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2013  Student Writer
Don't grow up.
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XenocidaEnder Featured By Owner Aug 12, 2013  Student Filmographer
Many thanks. This is exactly the kind of poetry I sought, setting the mood the way I like it.
...also, asking quite scary, important and overall likeable question. Once again, thanks, and well done
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Seraphine-Harmonium Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   Artisan Crafter
That's horrible! But in the tragic way, not as in bad writing. This makes me want to cry!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Seraphine-Harmonium Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013   Artisan Crafter
It's true! :cry:
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Daws3 Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   General Artist
I try to maintain a childlike wonder and view while taking my experiences into account and not be taken advantage of. I'm not completely what I want to be yet, but I'm working on it ;) Great job with this, you've expressed the concept perfectly.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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Daws3 Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013   General Artist
np :)
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GoodOldBaz Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconsadcryplz: This - this is his so heartbreaking.... growing up has sort of been a punch in the face for me - a disillusioning - the world seemed so wonderful... but now....? Sigh....I suppose I oughtn't to think that way - but it's hard not to.
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