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God called in sick today,
and the sky is dancing.
People walked hand in hand
singing in tune with the damned.

Running without stories
‘this is what tragedy feels like’
dead is the new alive
but misery loves company.

Racing with the devil
one doesn't dare stop against
the lord of the damned
he laughs against the concrete.

Can one play with madness
as they dance on clouds of mind?
Heavens a lie when butterflies are flying in hurricanes
And God takes a day off.

Wasted time throwing rocks at stars
souls refuse their eternal rest
they drink a cup of galaxy for breakfast
hymn of the shameless.

Obsession is an ugly word.
When dead becomes the new alive
the devil walks the earth
and God takes a day off work.
From my favorite place to get prompts when I encounter writers block, #343 'God called in sick today'. I had a bit of fun, wondering what could make sense and what wouldn't, and just really enjoyed writing this piece.

Please let me know what you think.

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:iconannaelynn:
AnnaeLynn Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2014  Hobbyist
wow.... just wow
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koreauchiha Featured By Owner Jul 9, 2013
i think this was awesome, i would love to see more pieces like this.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hello =Oilux

On behalf of #InspireTheUninspired, I would like to congratulate you on being featured within our group. Please take a look when you have time and support your fellow artists :aww:

Keep writing and inspiring!:dance:

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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Student Writer
Oh my gosh thank you so much! You have no idea how much this means to me.
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forestmeetwildfire Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome, it was my pleasure :aww:
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Seraphine-Harmonium Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013   Artisan Crafter
Really evocative! I didn't quite understand what the deal was with the devil "laughing against the concrete" but I love the flow of this piece, and so much of the imagery. I like the combination of the subtle horror and strange jubilation. It questions and challenges, and that's really awesome! Great poetry!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student Writer
Oh my thank you so much
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Seraphine-Harmonium Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013   Artisan Crafter
You are most welcome!
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GraciaTheirin Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2013
Dead is the new alive and misery loves company, well played plague rat well played
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you :skull:
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:iconulltraz:
ulltraz Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
a very beautiful job!!!indeed very good!!!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:iconulltraz:
ulltraz Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
you are welcome!!!i still owe you,having some set backs here,but on the way,i have not forgotten!!!
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student Writer
Darling take your time.
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:iconulltraz:
ulltraz Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
ok!!!
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Timatimy Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's amazing, I love it. :) Great work
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Timatimy Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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:iconundauntedifly:
undauntedifly Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
I love the concept of this! Super cool! Keep up the good work :)
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:iconundauntedifly:
undauntedifly Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Writer
You're very welcome!
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magneticecho Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Incredibly written! I can imagine exactly what you're trying to describe; you're really talented. <3
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:iconmagneticecho:
magneticecho Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome. :)
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:icondejers:
Dejers Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow. I like it.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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Tassadar723 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2013
Eh.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
:shrug:
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Tassadar723 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013
I liked the concept, but didn't care much for the execution. Sorry, just giving my two cents.
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That-Quiet-Guy Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
Not bad. Can't say I like the title though. Opening yourself up for comparison to Dave Havok and Charles Baudelaire is risky.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Very true, luckily I haven't been compared to them yet
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Neko-Chan199 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
So basically what happens in my class at school....;P
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
:lol:
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CMB9139 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
I've never honestly used the phrase " this blew my mind" before, but I intend to use it now, cause I feel that my mind has definitely been shattered to pieces ( in a good way ). I can completely picture the chaos, and how humans revel in sudden freedom after abandoning their moral conscience when God takes a day off.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Oh my thank you so much! I feel so honored that one of my pieces could blow your mind.
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:iconmatarahi:
MataRahi Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student
Very well written! o:
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:iconmatarahi:
MataRahi Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student
You're welcome!
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Veracities Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013
This poem is even more profound when you consider the possibility that God has already left for a while and that that's our current world. Overall this gave me chills. I loved your language and how you used words like "damned" and "galaxy"--abstract words that would give the work more depth and yet not words that are too over-used to have lost their meaning.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Oh my gosh...you're totally right.
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Please-Not-Last Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student General Artist
I loved the imagery, though it made me think of the recent string of tornadoes in Oklahoma.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Those poor people, I do hope they're okay.
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kagekabuki Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a lovely piece, but I feel I should point out that 'dammed' should be 'damned'.
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
You're right! Thank you!
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kagekabuki Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem ^^
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JakeJynx Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Professional Artisan Crafter
I'm afraid I don't 'get it.'
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:iconoilux:
Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
That's okay, I'm just writing about what I think would happen if God took a day off
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Dominion-of-Cain Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2013  Student General Artist
Is there an Emilie Autumn reference in here? "Dead is the New Alive?", "Misery Loves company?". This is awesome by the way.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Yes! I'm so happy that someone saw it.
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