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In the blink of an eye

You're ten
Wanting to be thirteen

Now you're thirteen
Wanting to be eighteen

Today you're eighteen
Wanting to be twenty-one

The days slip by without your notice

Before you guess your thirty
Maybe married.
Family on the way.

'I still have plenty of time'
You laugh to me

Fifty years have have passed
Children grown up
Life half lived

'But now come the golden years'
You say

Seventy-five years come and gone
'Where did my life go?'
You say.

Days pass by without notice
And still time passes by.
:iconoilux:
For :iconlive-love-write:'s weekly prompt of 'Dwindling Days'. I dont really like my poem that much, but I loved the prompt to much to let it pass by.



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~Reichieru-Uchiha Dec 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Reminds me a lot about the song "100 years" from Five For Fighting. Life might seem to have a lot of days in it but it can also be gone in an instant.
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=Oilux Dec 26, 2011  Student Writer
Oooo I love that song. :D
And thank you.
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~Reichieru-Uchiha Dec 27, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome. :)
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:iconthefinalhikari:
Thank you for participating in our prompt at #Live-Love-Write! :iconlaspinplz:

Simple but each line rang with an almost haunting sense of truthfulness. :nod: It's true that people too often take the time they have for granted and don't realize how much time they're losing until too many days have already dwindled.

Great work with this piece!


*TheFinalHikari
Founder of #Writers--club, #LandoftheSky, and #Live-Love-Write
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=Oilux Dec 2, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks you so much!
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:iconthefinalhikari:
You're welcome! :iconsantalaplz:
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~KarasuMegami Nov 29, 2011  Student General Artist
This is wonderful
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=Oilux Nov 29, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you!
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:iconkillmybleedingheart:
Wow very good and very powerful. Makes me wish death won't come
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=Oilux Nov 29, 2011  Student Writer
I know how you feel.
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