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Does death hurt?

When the knife digs into flesh
do you fall into your knees in pain
or simply in shock of motion?

When you slip away in the dark of sleep
does the dream still remain
as you travel to worlds unknown?

When the drugs hit your body
does your heart stop suddenly
or can you feel the imminent end?

When the noose slips tight
does your head feel heavy
and your limbs feel numb?

When the water rushes in
to the castle only of air
can you feel your breath cut off?

When the dirt piles over
and the air runs out
can you feel the choking?

So riddle me this,
oh master of death,
does it hurt to die?
Inspired by Rory in Doctor Who, the Last Centurion who died way too many times.
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SkunkyKitty662 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
... Words cannot describe my love of this poem..
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Oilux Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Student Writer
Oh my thank you.
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AlyStark Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2013
When your body dies and your mind remains awake in those last few moments of knowing...do you feel bliss or despair?

God your writing is so profound. Wish I could buy you a drink and pick your brain!
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Oilux Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you darling!
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Athe-Lindemann Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Raro pero hermoso.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Writer
Sí, justo lo que estaba buscando. Gracias.
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Mew-Suika Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful! And a very prominent question that one day will be answered but never shared.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2013  Student Writer
Truer words have never been spoken.
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ChetUnGwan Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Good question. And awesome inspiration.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks!
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ChetUnGwan Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome. And go Dr. Who!
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Oilux Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Student Writer
Doctor Who bros 5-ever
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CMBaggs Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2013
Very powerful. Thank you for sharing.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Student Writer
I'm just so joyful you enjoyed it.
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This poses a very interesting question... So many ways for your life to expire, either by accident or on purpose, but how painful are they? How long does it all last before it finally ends?

I particularly am intrigued about the second stanza... Do you just consistently explore a dream world when you're dead, based on all of your experiences throughout life? Is that how your heaven or hell is determined? So many questions, so little time... :iconthinkplz:

Going into my favourites, I love having stuff to think about. Keep up the great work! =)
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
I love you, I think the exact same things. Even though I wrote it my favorite stanza is the second one as well. Thanks for the fav as well!
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AussieDidge Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure pal, and it was deserving as well. =)

Take care. =)
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Irixian Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Professional Writer
"feel the imminent end"

"can you feel your breath cut off"

typos ;)
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Thanks I always make a few.
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lalazee123 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student
beautifully written
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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LILGUMMYBEAR Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Student
Wow that was really good! :)
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Oh thank you!
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HavingADream31 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
Very interesting :) good job
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you!
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HavingADream31 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2013
Your Welcome! :)
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BlueEyedKitty Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is strangely a beautiful poem, and I say strangely because of the topic. This is wonderful and written beautifully.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much. I really appreciate your wonderful comment.
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Ciao-Arrivederci Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good poem. And I am amused that Rory inspired this ;P He did indeed die quite often xD But that was part of the charm of the show :P Killing characters off and bringing them back to life just to be sadistic to the viewers :P
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
I swear Moffat just wanted us to suffer.
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Ciao-Arrivederci Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I wouldn't be surprised. MOFFAT!
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KandyKitty101 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Amazing~ Very beautiful!
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much!
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KandyKitty101 Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! ^^
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RickElfen908 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I thought this was pretty cool.
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Oilux Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2013  Student Writer
Aw thank you!
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