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Death Takes Two Sugars

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Death knocked on the door
came inside without invitation
poured herself some tea
and asked for a story.

He laughed at all the right parts,
cried when I cried,
asked for more than she received
silently demanding.

It cried with me and laughed with me
sipping their tea and listening
she wondered what I didn’t do
then told me how idiotic I was.

He told me about the children
I could have had but didn’t
and the falls that lifted me up
with the loss of others.

The story of how I almost killed a girl
when she ran into the street
scared her to run into the arms of her father
and never ran into the street again.

The tale of the man who was meant for me
yet still didn’t want me
and that was not my fault but his
for his life went on a different path.

Death pushed in his chair and declared,
‘It’s time for you to go’
despite my tea’s warmth
and my story was not quite finished.

‘I’m not ready to go’
I bellowed and threw my cup
it shattered but did not crash
hot tea spilled yet did not stain.

‘That does not matter, it is time.’
One long hand stretched out
beckoning me forward
promises that could not be said.

‘Time for what?’
I asked, still I knew the answer
for when the tea spilled and didn’t stain
and the cup fell but did not break, I knew.

‘Time to die.’
I had no choice, I had to go
for I was dead long before
death came to visit.
I combined two prompts, one from %PoeticalCondition's prompt of 'I never think about _____ anymore.' (my deviation was featured here) and the prompt from #writingmadefun of 'If Death Knocked On My door Today' (did not win).


Before you all start about how I said the gender of death changed a bunch, that is on purpose. Most people think of death as a man, but really I have never seen any indication that death was a girl or a boy, so I tried to incorporate that into my work. In my piece, death is called a man, woman, and an it. Since death is merely a skeleton, I took a bit of liberty with that.

Please let me know what you think, how I can improve, and other suggestions!
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skull emoticons death by pistra Death In Samarkand skull emoticons death by pistra -- from Seduction  by Jean Baudrillard:

"Consider the story of the soldier who spots Death at a crossing in the marketplace, and believes he saw him make a menacing gesture in his direction. He rushes to the king's palace and asks the king for his best horse in order that he might flee during the night far from Death, as far as the distant Samarkand. Upon which the king summons Death to the palace and reproaches him for having frightened one of his best servants. But Death, astonished, replies: "I didn't mean to frighten him! It was just that I was surprised to see this soldier here, when we had a rendez-vous tomorrow, in Samarkand..."

Full .pdf Seduction @ pactac.net/books/Seduction.pdf