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I went through the attic today
just to see the memories that lie.

Inside a box there was nothing
but cobwebs and fickle dust.

Yet in a corner of the room
there is the most beautiful memory,

photo albums of love
and presents from trips long ago.

I do not have to read the letters of love
for their words have long since been memorized.

A little stuffed lion
won at the circus,
shall sit in my lap
and remember along with me.

Never stitched in love this lion was,
but love was what it was meant to feel.

So as I sit and look,
from albums of old,
and presents from trips,
and letters of love,
and my lion in my lap,

I cry happy tears
at the memories that have passed.

'Darling, come downstairs!'
I can almost hear your voice shout below.

'Dear! You are never going to believe
the memories that I just unearthed.
Let's look together, and relive the old
and maybe then my tears for memories past
can become tears for something new.'
Written for the auditions of 'Scratch That' at :iconpoetry-book:. You can still join! Here's the info: [link]

I just have one question. Is my lover alive or dead? I wrote with my lover alive, but it can also be interpreted as that my lover was dead. So when you read it, did you imagine my lover alive or dead?




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ShikaAmazingness Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012
It sounded as thought they were dead :(
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Oilux Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012  Student Writer
Aw really? Well that's not what I intended.
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ShikaAmazingness Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2012
I think it's because of the line "I can almost hear your voice shout below." Which sort-of seems to imply that they can't say that anymore, either because they weren't together anymore and like enough time had passed that it was just pleasant memories or that the lover was dead but again, it'd been enough time that it was just accepted and happily reflected on.
And like the last stanza made me think that the person was going to go through the old things, maybe cry a little, but mostly move on to happy things to cry about :)

Haha sorry I wrote so much...
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dracogirl121 Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2012
i imagined your lover dead
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 29, 2012  Student Writer
How interesting. I imagined them alive instead of dead.
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Dragon-Clawshade Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012
Wow... Simply beautiful, the hints of sadness and reminiscence just complete it. Wonderfully written. ^^
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :tighthug:
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Oct 22, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
This is beautiful. I love the feelings it creates. Simply stunning! :faint: :heart:
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Oilux Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so much! And I have I said how much I love your icon? Because I really really do.
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summerday27 Featured By Owner Oct 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome.
Aww, thank you :aww:
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